Narrative Essay #1 Draft #1 TAB“Close your eyes, Close them I said close them!” …. Rocky they called him… Big Rocky. He had me at gunpoint in a suspicious darrake room where nobody was to be seen for miles as it -awkward sentence change use of seem seemed like the walls were never ending.reword this sentence it is very awkward The only light was the big light they use during police interrogations, this light was lit up on my sweat drenched face.describe don’t tell In a matter of seconds a large shadow had casted over me. The shadow kept growing in size,until this shadow came to life…. good idea to use a flashback It was an average day for me and my friends. We were about to gather up friends at our monthly get together down at Darrell's …show more content…
As I walked faster to catch up to my friends I saw something move out of the bushes in the corner of my eye I quickly ran to Jake and Mike and overheard them talking about this pathway and calling it “Rocky’s Road” and mentioning that they were some sort of group of people who beat up anybody who crosses through the path, I didn’t really care about all of this superstitious stuff at the time but once we came to the end of the path there was something else planned other than the Bowling Alley.this run on sentence needs work!!!Three boysshift in POV were blocking our path with baseball bats and a big black bag I thought to myself “wWe don’t have a bBaseball dDiamond near our town.this story is changing really fast and not in any direction To add to the equation it's not even garbage day, so why do they have a bag?”this is not making any sense As Jake was about to confront these people Mike fainted in shock. That left only me and Jake to deal with these boys. Jake was about to say something, but in an instant one of the boys flung his bat into the air and hit Jake.with his fist? Right in the jaw he hit Jake and in a matter of a seconds I was out cold! describe don’t tell“Three strikes and we were out!” cliche don’t use …show more content…
I heard nothing except for sirens ringing in the distance. The sirens gradually got louder and louder “Wee-Woo-Wee-Woo” until they stopped in front of the building where I was all alone. The door was smashed on by these people in black suits. He said his name was Rocky and he asked me where his “boys” were. I didn’t know so I did not respond. Rocky slipped out his gun from his holster in his belt and pinned it to my temple. I instantly froze.describe don’t tell I didn't know what I got myself into.but weren’t you knock out and kidnapped? As He kept repeating the question I told myself “close your eyes - close your eyes” My mind was boggled so I didn't know what to do. Soon the windows were cracked in and five police officers in their uniforms came and circled around me and Rocky. the police told him to step away from me and to drop the gun and so he did. this story need to linear thinking The Police had put him under arrest and told me I was free to go to my friends who were eagerly waiting for me to return safely. I asked them who called for help and why Mike wasn’t hurt at all. Mike said that he faked having to fall and faint. That meant the boys didn't take him away. While we were being hauled away in the van he quickly noted the license plate number “503-HUR” Mike said with an accomplished
Dunaway had drove the ball over the shortstop 's head and had rounded second, it had been a close play, so she slid into third. The umpire, strong and confident, stood up and called her out. Tears rushed down the young girl 's face, as the coach, coach Dalfino, yelled at her saying, “This is no circumstance to cry.” The athlete had walked off of the field, limping in pain. Seriena’s team had two games that day so, once the second
At 12:02 p.m., Mr. Wilson calls in to the dispatcher to notify about the two men while moving his police unit to block not only the two men but traffic as well. According to New York Times, a dispute started to arise between Michael Brown, who is facing the front driver’s window with his hands spread to the side to display that he means no harm, and Officer Wilson sitting on the driver’s seat of the police unit. Due to conflict between Michael Brown and Officer Wilson, two bullets were fired from Officer Wilson’s gun one hitting Mr. Brown’s thumb briefly while the second bullet missed him. After shots were fired, Michael Brown began to run east along with Officer Wilson trying to chase him on foot. Once Mr. Brown comes to a competent halt, he turns in order to face Officer Wilson.
According to the hiding a suspect story, it seems unclear of how Mike was shot, and who is the real a culprit criminal? I was very confused that why nobody did not see who is shot and killed Mike? Because everyone should see Ted began showing his “quick draw” and Ted was putting the pistol against Mike’s forehead. If Ted shot a gun to Mike in this timing, everybody should have seen Ted killed Mike. However, from this story “The stories that went around the next day expressed confusion over how the gun happened to go off and whether or not Mike was shot right then, or whether or not Ted had the gun when Mike was shot.”
Thanking the Sir, I grab my glass and sit down to relax but find myself in a slight state of paranoia. A muffled scream is heard and I see some silhouettes dragging a figure towards a room. Thinking nothing of it, I return to peace taking slow sips of my drink. That peace is broken as I feel two strong men grab me, and someone else covers my mouth with some sort of fabric. Before I can even struggle, I feel my heart ache in pain and my body gives up drifting into a state of sleep.
Battle of Bull Run My eyes shutter my eyelids feel heavy. I can barely keep them open. I take two deep breathes and I attempt to sit up. Suddenly, I feel a sharp pain in my upper leg.
ALONE( In New England 1861.) It is the year 1861, I am a ten year old boy named Kevin living in the slums of New England and have lost my parents to a disease called Measles. It is tough living in such a horrible place like this I hate eating rats and trash all day after seeing a group of pickpocketers scattered around the streets stealing money from rich people, they did it so quietly and they didn’t even notice. That day I decided to follow them
We snuck in the building it was trashed and there were shards of broken glass on the floor and all the tables were flipped over,Just then I realized this was my dad's store the same one who'd been robbed 4 days ago. Then the police started to leave so we got back on the police car and went back to the police station. After we got back we were running some errands for the police when I heard voices “Come on theres gotta be something we can do”said voice nombre uno “sir we just can't catch this guy he's always gone before we get there”said voice 2. Then the door opened and all the men came out.
Veronica Gregory Mr. Greenwell COMII02 10/13/16 Police Body Cameras: The Worn Truth Driving along the freeway from church. You suddenly see flashing lights through your rear view mirror. You keep driving only to find out that the lights that are flashing are for you to pull over.
A breeze flew by, scraping past Earvin’s face like sandpaper. The stale air reeked from the smell of death and rot. Earvin was accustomed to it by now, just like any man who had stayed in the Capitals long enough. He shot a gaze at his surroundings. The stone walls stood by both his sides like a couple of Giants.
BOONG BOONG! I hear the ship's horn echo through our tiny dorm which we are sharing with 7 other people. I can still hear the gunshots ring through my ears, the sound makes me shiver. My home town in Cabo Mexico is under attack by scary people with faces cloaked with a dusty black cloth who talk some sort of language that I would never understand.
As I was looking up I could see the truck rolling in my direction. I stood there and watched it move. When it fell off the shelf I didn’t move. I stood right where I was and let the truck hit me in the head. The truck had cracked my head open.
I distinctly tasted blood as he shoved me to the ground. I tried to catch myself from falling but was too weak to regain balance. As I lay there, nearly lifeless, my eyes widened when I heard the high pitched pleas for life in the near distance, I knew that this wasn’t the only soldier. I knew that I pull through and help those struggling citizens. A second soldier rushes through the door and is given commands to take me outback and pull the trigger.
But something was strange going on we were being followed. But the follower was in front of us, but we knew he was watching us. As we were walking there was a slight hill the man in front went up it and disappeared, we had no idea where he went but we figured one of those were his house so we keep walking then around 2-3 minutes later we heard a man in a loud whisper saying things like “hey you guys” “you kids” and things like that and at about where Haffner 's gas station is on lowell st is where the voices stopped. At that time my house was visible and we ran to it that was enough scares for one night.
In a small village, like no other, about 15 years ago, there was three protagonist named Lizzy, John and Nick. Near this village, there was the town river that provides them with water and a mysterious cave that was forbidden to enter. The people who lived in this village lived in fear about the mysterious cave. As the story goes a wicked witch lives in the cave and anyone who had entered had never returned. Lately, people have begun to fall ill and they have reason to believe that it's the witch who lives in the cave that is causing the illness by turning the water green.
Before I knew it, he was coming after me. I couldn’t move, all I could do was scream for help, but there was no one around to help me. Before he could get to me, I woke up. Cold sweat was