Shark Wars
EJ ALTBACKER
Did you know even under water there is a war going on, not by humans but by sharks. It is not all peace in Shark Wars written by Ej Altbacker. Shark Wars is about a reef shark named grey who causes trouble in his hometown. Eventually he will get banished and has to survive on his own. He ends up wandering into a different species of sharks territory looking for food. He has to help them fight in a war in order to get food and a shelter. An adventurous characters, off-this-world setting and an ineffective theme make Shark Wars a book all shark lovers will pick up.
What happens if someone ever saw a group of sharks fighting another group until their last breath. “You are hereby banished by Coral Shiver” (51) This will make some people think about
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