Exophthalmos: Transitional Phrases

Exophthalmos Exophthalmos is a disorder where fluid and tissue builds up around the eye. Eventually, this build-up of tissue pushes the eye forward out of orbit, causing massive complications associated with vision changes. Exophthalmos, however, is a secondary condition, which means it derives from the causes of other diseases, such as Grave’s Disease and Hyperthyroidism. As stated previously, exophthalmos is a secondary condition. The most common source of Exophthalmos is an imbalance of the thyroid gland. This gland produces important hormones that contribute to regulating growth, metabolism, and development. In Grave’s Disease, the thyroid gland is producing an excessive amount of growth hormones, which affects other systems of the

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Usage of Transitional Phrases
Transitional Words Score: 77 This score is based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper. You did equal or better than 72% of the people in your education level.

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One sign of an excellent writer is the use of transitional phrases (e.g. therefore, consequently, furthermore). Transitional words and phrases contribute to the cohesiveness of a text and allow the sentences to flow smoothly. Without transitional phrases, a text will often seem disorganized and will most likely be difficult to understand. When these special words are used, they provide organization within a text and lead to greater understanding and enjoyment on the part of the reader.

The following transitional phrases were found in your document:

usually, since, eventually, and, however, in fact, in conclusion, nevertheless

Consider using additional transitions where appropriate:
• consequently
• moreover
• notwithstanding
• accordingly
• conversely
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•Nevertheless, vision may be preserved using attentive care to keep the ...

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Sentence Beginnings

Simple Sentence Starts: 9%

You did equal or better than 83% of the people in your education level.

Well done! Your sentences display variety in their beginnings.

Variety is the hallmark of a good writer and this is especially true in regards to sentence starts. Creatively arranging sentence beginnings breaks up the monotony and choppy style associated with a simple noun phrase followed by a verb. This does NOT mean that all sentences should begin with prepositional phrases, transitions, or adverbial phrases, but it does mean that you should be certain to pay attention to sentence starts and deliberately edit for variety if necessary.

Here are some simple sentence starts that we found in your text:
• Exophthalmos is a...
• Imaging tests used are...
• Prevention is almost...

Starts by Part of Speech: Adjective: 9% Adverb: 9% Article: 0% Conjunction: 0% Noun: 13% Preposition: 22% Pronoun: 0% Verb: 0% Other: 44%

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