Another thing I felt I could get better at would be detailing without flying off topic and losing that main purpose for the audience. The detailing could use some work (like everything else), but it is not too bad, at least to me. I could be more specific in certain cases such as, “To me, my older brother was my biggest influence when it came to my reading and writing.” (Sheffield, Eric Major Assignment #1, 2017) where I could have elaborated more, or just used a better sentence in general. But in that first paragraph, what I attempted to get across to my readers was, how important that memory was to me and how it impacted my literacy. Then I explained that memory along with some background information to help the audience understand it a little more.
For me, ENGL101 served a great purpose in my academic writing skills as well as improving my confidence. I was never confident in my academic writing, in fact I only knew so little. I didn’t know where I stood or how I could progress but now I do. I certainly feel a significant improvement in my growth as a writer because of this course, even in such a brief period of time. I have been able to graze the surface of a few of the course goals, but I am aware that there is still a massive amount of room to grow and learn.
Furthermore, there is an opposite of positive propaganda which is negative propaganda. One of the most horrific attacks on american soil is the 911 Twin Towers and Pentagon attack. Newspapers, Media, and the internet stories all had an Idea about what really happened. These daily used sources were used to tell a story to the world about a tragic attack which was told one way and believed by some to be another way. In the news papers it said , “Nobody immediately claimed responsibility for the attacks”( ).
Osama bin Laden was one of the United States most wanted for the attacks on September 11. The deaths of many this day justified the death of Osama bin Laden. Many people would see this as free outlet to committing a sin. Just like the hero who diverted the plane to save many, society would view the assassination of Osama bin Laden as creating a better world by ridding it of some evil. This is to say that society would consider the murders by a person a greater sin than that of society killing person who committed the crime.
This gives me a jump start, or flow of ideas that can later on benefit my paper. In the article, Writing What Matters: A Students’ Struggle to Bridge the Academic/Personal Divide Emily Strasser uses the following sentence to highlight and pinpoint the real true value of writing “Writing can and should be much more than sophisticated sentence structure and nuanced word choices. The devices of grammar and rhetoric remain superficial skills until a writer employs them to express important and powerful feelings, thoughts and ideas” (WaW Pg.200). I enjoy writing about myself because it helps me express my feelings. A paper may include correct grammar and word-context, but until the writer can intertwine powerful thoughts and feelings into the work, the writer is unable to accomplish the overall intended goal.
During the first card marking I became conscious of the fact I am no longer being forced to think a certain way. One of my biggest adjustments has been the freedom to express ideas in ways I haven’t had the ability to before. It has always been do it this way or don’t do it at all, but not anymore. This came to me with one of our first assignments, the “I am From” poem. I was encouraged to develop imagery and descriptive language in unconventional ways.
While writing this paper I learned how to self-correct mistakes that I would make a lot throughout my paper. One of my biggest writing errors that I have now learned to fix is comma splice errors, which is when I incorrectly connected my sentences with only a comma. This paper also made me realize that in the first draft you can forget a lot of details that you think you put in. Then when spending the time to revise you can make your paper more engaging to the audience by adding the missed details. When finished with this paper it made me realize that I need to work on my lead-ins and thesis at the beginning of my paper to grab the reader and tried to improve this with each of my papers that followed.
Adapting the sentences to active voice helped, but they still needed words trimmed to be as concise as possible without losing meaning. The first sentence of the third paragraph was too wordy, so I split it into two sentences and condensed them. Then I searched for any phrases I could prune words from. The word “downsize” replaced “cut down on their” in the second paragraph, and I reworked the boilerplate to make it more concise. I also removed the words “thank” in the second paragraph and “supporting the school” in the quote.
The name itself, F2F (Face-to-Face) Studio stood out on my schedule, but I did not think anything of it because it qualified as English and that was fine with me. But as soon as I sat down for this class I immediately knew this was not a general English class. When Mark and David both walked into the classroom there were murmurs about which one was the teacher. In my mind I thought, it is never a good sign to have two teachers in a classroom. In the history of my schooling, it shows that the class is not capable of
Back in high school, my writing mostly committed of timed exams and practice for International Baccalaureate exams so my grammar and organizing did not matter as much as the content and speed of my work. Therefore, I had to learn new types of writing techniques and become more careful and aware of my work. In some ways, I had to reinvent myself as a writer. The course made me analyze pieces and develop my own argument which is very different from content memorization that I did in high school. I think my growth is very evident in my final paper.
. and deny the existence of prophets and religion, they would not bother him," Ahmadinejad said. "However, if someone were to deny the myth of the Jews ' massacre, all the Zionist mouthpieces and the governments subservient to the Zionists tear their larynxes and scream against the person as much as they can" (Washington Post). Ahmadinejad also stated that publicizing his holocaust denial was a major achievement of his presidency. George Lincoln Rockwell, an American prominent holocaust denier, became known as the “American Hitler”.
Levitt and Dubner start right off the bat using a rhetorical strategy called appeal to pity by very vividly listing the things the Ku Klux Klan did to their victims. This strategy makes us think about how terrible those the things they did are now and how it would be front page news if any of those things happened to any person nowadays. Once our emotions are conjured up and in tune, us as readers are more likely to agree with what the authors have to say. If Levitt and Dubner did not want us to
Interventionism is not so far off from something like the tyrannical nature of bullies around the middle school playgrounds of the United States, poking around in other people’s business, reminiscent of authoritarian leaders of the past. Democracy spreading in the Middle East is counterintuitive and according to Mike, it does no benefits to intervene any longer. He believes that intervening in other countries problems, motivates a sensitive group, the Muslims all around the globe, into triggering unfortunate actions like shooting up a nightclub. Why he believes this concept, is explained through six notions; U.S. support of Israel, support of dictatorship in the Middle East, inhabiting of the Arabian Peninsula, Israelis escalating, reliance on inexpensive oil, military presence in other countries in the “Muslim world”, and lastly, our unfair disposition to categorize as terrorist, any Muslim population that one of our allies (Russia or China) dislikes. Above all else, the self-appointed duty of America, as the democratic police of the world, has ironically become our Achilles
Agreeing with what Morey and Yaqin have to say, Mohammed Saleem and Michael Thomas studied the reporting of September 11th terrorist attacks in textbooks and found that Muslim Americans are misrepresented. They go on to say that the topic of 9/11 is presented in superficial ways, where a textbook will not show the impact it had on an American Muslim itself but only those around them. Muslim Americans in the United States experienced the impact of stereotypes in countless forms. A small group of extremist, whose terrorist actions determine the public image of the entire Muslim community, misrepresenting Muslim Americans who do not follow Islam to that extreme. A common theme that surrounds many of the articles I have read, show that Muslim Americans feel confused about their identity and their place within society.
It can help open more doors and help you go someplace in your paper you didn’t think you could go. I feel like it was easy for me to add quotes and to explain more of what I wanted to talk about, but it was a challenge to figure out paraphrasing and summarizing the ideas of others that I could use in my unit 3 paper without