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Summary Of The Thesis Of My Paper

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The thesis of my paper is clear within the first paragraph. The key points of the essay are developed to support the thesis, with all the key points seeming to be developed thoroughly. However, I think some of the key points would benefit from more evidence from the sources. Originally, the paper was far too long and I had to take some things out to compensate for this, including a few pieces of evidence. Unfortunately, this left the paper lacking evidence in some areas. There was one point in particular that needed more evidence, which I plan to add in my second draft. All the sources used were credible sources and underscored each point. The essay is effectively organized, going from one point to the next in a clear manner. The introduction,

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