Preventing Teenagers Suicide

In Korea, committing suicide turns out to be one of the main factors killing teenagers, and its rate is increasing according to a government survey (Shim). To prevent teenagers’ suicide, measures must be taken(try to avoid passive voice) because the high suicide rate among teenagers promotes the thought that their lives are worthless and motivates imitated suicide. However, some people might argue that to save people killing themselves is not right because it disregards their decisions. Although it is true that deciding to die is one’s right and violate this right is wrong, teenagers’ suicide is not the case. (this sentence is really hard to read and understand.. Try to reword it..) Because teenagers decide to die impulsively due to their instant

Try not to use the same word all the freaking time. ). There is an effect called Werther-effect, which indicates the phenomenon that an admired person’s suicide causes imitated, or suicide contagion (Niederkrotenthaler, Herberth, and Sonneck). The term ‘an admired person’ includes a celebrity. In other words, the Wherther-effect means that suicide rate increases after a report of a celebrity’s suicide. This effect seems to be true when analyzing a graph from Korea Association for Suicide Prevention. The graph compares suicide rates before and after celebrities’ suicides in Korea. This graph shows that after celebrities’ suicides and the result of that is (writing like this way can be natural than just put comma)suicide rates increased (Yu and Lee). All celebrities’ suicides described in this graph were broadcast. (start in different way)What makes the matter worse (The worst thing) is that teenagers are more sensitive to celebrities than other age groups because they are in adolescence. Hence, a coverage about a celebrity’s suicide affects teenagers more seriously. Therefore, if celebrities’ suicides are not broadcast (are not... how about “does not” .. if you are gonna use the word “broadcast” as a verb.)and treated seriously by the media, not only a general suicide rate, but also a teenagers’ suicide rate will be

Korean students get a lot of academic stress because of intense competition for the Korean Scholastic Aptitude Test (KSAT). The more academic stress a student gets, the more suicidal impulse the student has (Moon 150). In addition, teenagers are emotionally unstable due to a feature of adolescence. Even university students need a suicide (Generally, people think university students can handle their troubles however, even they need a suicide prevention that helps students counseling and consulting.) prevention consultation, and many universities offer counseling services to prevent students’ suicide. For example, Ohio State University’s website has a page to inform how to get a help when students feel suicidal. Just talking about one’s condition and troubles can relieve stress, and it can be the best way to dispel suicidal thoughts (“Suicide Prevention”). Counseling classes for preventing suicide are essential for elementary, middle, and high schools, all things