Answers To Thomas Hardin's Argument

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Connor, you did a wonderful job on your essay. It appears that you grasped the material and for the most part you articulate your ideas in a clear, concise manner. The examples you provided in the second paragraph helped to strengthen your argument. One suggestion I have is to work of varying your syntax. It will help will the flow of your essay. Another suggestion I have is to vary your wording. At times the wording of your essay makes it tricky to understand the point you are trying to make. I think that you could have expanded your summarization on the mutual coercion aspect of the essay. You provided an in depth analysis of Hardin’s argument until this point. The abrupt change in your writing style makes the end of the paragraph seem slightly

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