RABBIT presents as a character driven sports drama. The script showcases the life of a young, emotionally scarred foster child, who gets a second chance to have a happy life when a caring coach recognizes her running talent. The concept reminds one of the award-winning BLIND SIDE movie.
The tone is consistently dramatic. There are solid themes about second chances, trust, abandonment, never giving up, and overcoming adversity. The idea that Rabbit excels at running nicely fits with her inner struggle of running from emotional attachment.
A very likable female protagonist, Rabbit, drives the story. She’s complex and flawed. She doesn’t always make the right choices, but the audience easily forgives her and roots for her to be happy.
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He sees the good in her. The idea that she’s resistant to join the team works well. When she joins, however, she immediately seems to quit when she disappears. Consider making her “quit” at the midpoint. After she joins the team, focus more on her relationship with the other team members and preparing for her racing meet.
Consider highlighting the idea of a “major” race or championship race. This is a tried and true formula in sports drama. This builds anticipation to the final race. In the end, Rabbit would overcome her emotional struggle (mother, abandonment), as well as her physical struggle winning the race. Working towards a championship gives the story and the character a solid physical goal, while also struggling with the emotional goal. It will focus the structure. It will naturally generate tension.
Instead of using Donna as the main tension, one can use Skylar or another racer from another team. Maybe they try to get Rabbit kicked off the team by planting drugs in her locker. However, the idea of drugs has to be foreshadowed. Maybe Rabbit has trouble with learning (learning disorder)and this can add another layer of
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It’s a bit unsatisfying that she doesn’t believe Rabbit.
Skylar is a troubled girl. She’s somewhat neglected by her mother and she’s desperate to get a scholarship. She’s vulnerable and also has a hard exterior. However, as stated, her story is too much like Rabbit.
The janitor, Bernie is, again, likable. It’s touching when he leaves a food bag for Rabbit.
Donna, Eddie, and the principal, however, are presented as being too one-dimensional. They present as being all “bad” and evil. Most characters/people have more than one side.
The dialogue has strengths and weaknesses. The voices reflect each character’s personality, morals, and values, but at the same time the dialogue is a bit on the nose or too straightforward, “She was gonna kidnap me and give me away!” The dialogue on page 96 is also considered on the nose. Sometimes Melissa and Saunders sound too formal with each other, as if not married.
The characters also tend to talk to one’s self and this begins to sound and look contrived. Avoid this and only use talking to one’s self if absolutely needed.
SUMMARY & MARKETABILITY
Social dramas can be difficult to market, especially about child
The straggles of the kids whose parents are not at home a whole lot are shown in the novel Williwaw. Which is written by Tom Bodett and published in 1999, is a story about two kids from Alaska, Ivan and September who are 12 and 13 years old, they got into the trouble because they did not follow their dads rules. The main theme “challenges of life” can clearly be seen within the novel Williwaw. For Ivan and September challenges of taking care for themselves means staying at home alone for several weeks because their father is not home and their mother died a few years ago. That means that they have to look after themselves and stay out of the troubles and the most important follow their dads rules.
DIALOGUE: Too long, but it does reveal the inner character to the audience. There are better ways to share the characters wants and needs through action. Action always is more compelling the talking. The dialogue slows down the pace of the story.
Phrases such as "the sweet warm smell" described many scenes and most characters were stereotypical. The humor, though pleasant, was laughable for its immaturity, not wit. However, simplicity isn't enough to spoil the entire
The plot is driven by a very likable teen, Ava, who through the course of her journey, learns to grow up and transforms into a mature woman, who finds her own voice. Ava is driven by deep inner conflict and her need for a loving family. The script offers a three-act structure. There’s a solid inciting event when she tries the dress on and is transported into her new world.
One example of this was when she and Sam were investigating Borodino field trying to find the Charm School. She stayed silent even when the guards saw them, even when Sam had to shoot the guards, she remained calm and that ensured both of their safety. Another example was when she and Sam were captured on their flight out of Russia and taken to the Charm School. She was silent and obeyed their commands so she and Sam wouldn’t be killed. She also stayed patient and calm when she knew she was facing death if Seth didn’t come.
There’s no doubt the characters are delightful. Each one is bright, colorful, and eccentric. Each is very original and refreshing. The audience roots for each other. Ben is “stuck” in Mulch.
For instance, the way how he spend his time and how he became a man when his pet die establishes a stronger example. In this manner, even it was difficult with all the work the fawn required he always make the time. And, at the end of a long day, including school and chores, Jody would rush outside to play and train it because this would put a smile on his tired face. Jody really enjoyed his fawn and it take the place of his brother and friend. So, when Flag was dead everything he use to love in nature, even the sing of the frogs, come to be sadness.
She has showed us to be ourselves and be true, or if not it would always come back to us. Confidence is a big part of her; she has done many wild things to save masses of people on the show. “Be humble in your confidence yet courageous in your character” she
Challenges are around in a daily basis, even though it takes time and effort to resolve, ultimately, challenges provides people with experience and growth. In the book “ I Am The Messenger” by Michael L. Printz, the theme challenge echoes throughout the novel. Ed Kennedy, the protagonist, is portrayed as an ordinary, underaged cab driver who overcomes numerous challenges and experienced an emotional joyride while being the “Messenger”. As the book progressed, Ed Kennedy transitioned from an underachieving low life to an uplifting, obliging and enthusiastic helper by undergoing events emotionally, physically, and intellectually.
The characters of Ruth, Mama, and Walter show us the importance of family and the American dream. With Ruth being helpful and caring, Mama hardworking and sincere, Walter ties in with his hope. This play really shows how having dreams can keep a person going and on their feet. Having read this book, I have found that having dreams in not just a fantasy, if you can find something you are good at and work hard at it, you can make those dreams come
While reading the story, you can tell in the narrators’ tone that she feels rejected and excluded. She is not happy and I’m sure, just like her family, she wonders “why her?” She is rejected and never accepted for who she really is. She is different. She’s not like anyone else
I think that the theme for this story is family is worth saving. Max almost died several different times just to save Angle or Fang. Also, in Intex one of the workers revives his son in a worse form just to be able to have him be alive for two more years. On both the good and bad sides there has been sacrifices to make family last longer. This whole book seems to revolve around family and resilience.
Her personal experience is socially and theoretically constructed and emotions play an essential role in the process of identity formation. Her identity is not fixed, which is portrayed by inquisitiveness that her own mother and Aunt thought she was possessed, enhanced and made this story an enriching experience. The family is the first agent of socialization, as the story illustrates, even the most basic of human activities are learned and through socialization people
It’s unclear, now, what her goal is, what the stakes are, and what will drive act two and three. The professional formatting can be stronger. Scenes are overly descriptive. This slows the pace.
Tedium along with her acquainted surroundings makes her keener on adventures, thus once a white rabbit with pink eyes runs reachable, she directly follows it into the rabbit hole with no drop of hesitation, and not considering how she goes to urge out once more. Alice’s curiosity is displayed throughout her quest in Wonderland. Once Alice reaches very cheap of the outlet she finds herself in an exceedingly long, low hall. The corridor is lined with several doors all of that are fast. She discovers a small door she hadn’t seen before, that results in a beautiful garden choked with fountain and flowers.